evidence and appeals

In this essay, I think I did a good job of pursuading the reader. I gave many examples of personal experience, and also a few hypothetical situations. To prove my personal stories are true for many people, I added some results from 3 research studies I found online. For my 4th source I used a magazine with a story directly related to my topic. Overall, I feel like this paper was a little hard to start but once I got going it turned out pretty good.